Masses of shaggy blond hair obscured bright blue eyes; set in a face that seemed to be cut from stone. Intensely focused on a computer screen, his fingers flew like lightning as rows upon rows of coding filled the monitor, bypassing all of the buildings security. A grim smile flitted across his otherwise impassive face as he initiated his program.
Sirens began wailing as all security protocols were negated and doors began opening. Standing slowly, he calmly packed up his equipment and walked out of the building and into the night; as others more accustomed to confrontation, flooded the building.
1 comment:
Wow! Apparently oneword has its act together and you're not stuck with the same word for a week straight. I could get used to that.
Random grammar notes: misuse of semi-colon, and also some dangling modifiers. I like the final line in the first paragraph a lot; there's a bit of cliché going down with the lightning but you set the scene quickly, and it works.
Remember we talked about starting sentences with verbs in the gerundive form?
You really have brought this character to life, though - he's good at what he does, but he realizes he's not good at everything, and he sticks to his job. Could be super intense as an original character in the future. :)
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