Monday, January 31, 2011
Jelly
'How cliche,' she thought and rolled her eyes in self derision; but it was true never the less, that every time he looked at her she felt her legs turn to jelly. It was hard to focus and stand up straight. She hated to think of her reaction if he ever actually touched her. She was certain it would be more like water than jelly.
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I don't think it's much of a cliché. I like the way you carried the theme all the way through. Usually when I write these I end up dumping the theme part way through.
"Nevertheless" is traditionally one word, if that helps. Also, I recommend hitting up Strunk & White for a review on that sweet thing called the semi-colon.
Well done using the word - it's a unique take on it all.
I'd love to see what happens to these two.
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