Whispers echoed through the ancient cathedral, ghosts of ages past and promises of the future.
Amara ran her fingers over the worn stonework and gazed up in wonder at the impossibly high ceilings, they defied gravity. The pews were of dark stained and scarred wood, the cushions were threadbare and deteriorating.
Amara jumped ever so slightly when the bells tolled out the hours, it was twilight. Nervous, Amara backed up, she had no idea that anyone was here, it had looked abandoned from the front.
Stepping back Amara let out a small scream as she stepped out onto nothing. Wide eyed, Amara pinwheeled her arms, trying to regain her balance when a hand came out of no where and grabbed her wrist.
Amara felt herself pulled forward, away from the gaping darkness below her; into a solid chest.
Gasping she had wrapped her arms around the person before her, trying to steady herself. When she had control over herself she looked up, and into the most piercing green eyes she had ever seen. The smile matched the twinkle of amusement in the handsome face before her.
"That was a close one," the stranger said, pulling Amara away from the stairs.
3 comments:
This reminded me of the days when we wandered through English cathedrals stolen from the catholics. Again with the misplaced modifiers, but the twist at the end was good times. It would be such a shame if that handsome man were a priest, eh?
He's not..... grins evilly....
Help with the modifiers, which ones are misplaced and why?
Ah. Misplaced modifiers are when you place at the beginning of a sentence an action that has no actor. Even if it seems obvious who the actor is as the actor is named later, it's still a misplaced modifier and may confused readers, e.g., "Stepping back, Amara let out a small scream." As soon as the readers go into that sentence, they think, "What's stepping back? Who's stepping back? What's going on?" In that sentence you use a form of "to step" twice anyway, so it'd be easier to say, "Amara stepped out onto nothing and let out a small scream." You get me?
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