Original telling: "Jesse hated being called pretty."
Showing:
Jesse stared at the staff paper, trying to hear the music in his head. One of the other actors clapped him on the shoulder.
“Don’t wrinkle your brow so hard when you think, pretty boy,” he said.
Jesse’s shoulders tightened, and his grip on his pencil went white-knuckled.
The other actor laughed. “Don’t look so angry, Carlisle. Only with your pretty face I’m sure the fangirls will call you broody and swoon some more.” Then he peered closer. “What are you doing?”
Jesse slammed his notebook shut and was on his feet. “Sorry, I’ve got to leave.” He fled.
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