Original Tell: She never doubted who she was and what she wanted.
Showing:
Xin had made her choice, she wanted no other.
Xin's arms snaked out, encircling the man beside her, pulling him back into her warm embrace.
“Where do you think you are going?” She asked Sheva.
Xin silenced whatever he was going to say, pressing her lips to his in a passionate kiss. Sheva returned it, loosing himself in the sensory overload. Xin finally broke it off, breathing hard and smiling, her lips bare inches from his.
“Why me?” Sheva asked, struggling to catch his breath.
“Because I want you, and because I love you, I always have.”
1 comment:
Awww, romantic and sweet. Erm...some cliches I'd try to avoid outside of songwriting, like "warm embrace" and "passionate kiss," although you're strapped for wordcount, so I understand. "Loose" is the opposite of tight whereas "lose" is the opposite of "keep" or "win"; a lot of people get those mixed up, though, so no worries.
Overall, you totally showed! Well done. Yay for schmoop.
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